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Friday 6 July 2012

The Fallen




A myna I knew, loved the clouds

She soared high free from doubts

Came an eagle and they tangled mid air

She came tumbling down to the earthen layer




The eagle was gentle so he flew down

To humbly ask for the myna's pardon

The myna quickly forgave

The ignorant eagle took her leave




Watching the eagle fly high

She stood again ready to try

'Twas then she knew that a wing she'd lost

Now all she could do, was hop on dust



With dusk returned the mighty bird

Shocked to see the work of his hand

With the hurting myna he stayed back

Thence every day, dusk and nights black






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55 comments:

  1. Ash6 July 2012 at 23:07

    well written, anupam... always enjoy reading your posts!

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    1. Anupam Patra7 July 2012 at 01:48

      Thanks Ash. I'm indeed lucky to have such supportive readers like you. Who lend their support to me for all my write ups.

      Thank You lady !!!

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  2. Sohini6 July 2012 at 23:38

    loved this one, specially the ending!

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    1. Anupam Patra7 July 2012 at 01:57

      Hello Sohini,

      'M glad that you liked the poem and its ending. The last stanza was penned by me after 12 hours of publishing the poem. Originally it comprised the first three stanzas only as I wanted to keep it sad. But I guess I came around to give it an optimistic ending. Therefore the ending is my fav too.\

      Thanks Sohini, and welcome aboard !!!

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    2. Meoww10 September 2012 at 00:19

      I am glad you gave it an optimistic ending! It is wonderful.

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  3. sudha...a touch of madness7 July 2012 at 12:19

    Good one, and particularly bcoz of its ending. Tragic endings have their charms but nothing beats one that reaffirms our faith in virtues and belief in a just world. M glad u added the 4th stanza.

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  4. Ashitha8 July 2012 at 06:03

    gud one Anupam..loved reading it :)

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  5. Jayashree Srivatsan11 July 2012 at 01:09

    Very Nice Anupam. Nice message!

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  6. Anupam Patra11 July 2012 at 07:19

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  7. Uma Uthra9 September 2012 at 08:02

    nice poem :) *With dusk returned the mighty bird

    Shocked to see the work of his hand

    With the hurting myna he stayed back

    Thence every day, dusk and nights black

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    loved reading :)

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  8. Soulmate 9 September 2012 at 10:18

    Excellent meaning behind the lines...!! Liked the way you have written the poem!

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  9. Sahithya Sridhar9 September 2012 at 21:56

    very cute!..:)

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  10. gunjan kumar9 September 2012 at 22:41

    lot of wonderful ladies comments... :)(smiling)
    NIce poem... good work .I see you write fewer poems but when it comes ,it expresses everything.

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    1. Anupam Patra10 September 2012 at 19:46

      Ha Ha..I guess the wonderful ladies are fond of the Myna.
      Thanks for reading Gunjan

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  11. Rahul Bhatia10 September 2012 at 00:59

    Lovely writing Anupam!

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  12. the little princess10 September 2012 at 01:55

    nice poem!! loved it!

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  13. Palak Dua10 September 2012 at 03:11

    wonderful work :) keep going :)

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  14. Sangrywords10 September 2012 at 03:37

    Splendid Anupam ... loved reading it !!

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  15. MRC10 September 2012 at 08:12

    Hi ,


    Dropped by to thank you for liking my post on Indivine. Im not usually a fan of poetry , but I enjoyed reading this one.I think you did well to add the bittersweet ending.

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  16. Sri Valli10 September 2012 at 09:22

    Beautiful story weaved as poem! Lovely thoughts!

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  17. Unknown10 September 2012 at 21:07

    Lovely poem, beautiful alignment of words to express emotions.

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    1. Anupam Patra10 September 2012 at 22:13

      Thanks Satya for your generous words of appreciation

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  18. indu chhibber10 September 2012 at 21:19

    Ah this is a very heartening thought--well penned.

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  19. Deepa Duraisamy10 September 2012 at 21:58

    This is the first time I am reading poetry on your blog. I always come here for the excellent posts you write related to law. Well written!

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    1. Anupam Patra10 September 2012 at 22:37

      Thanks Deepa. I'm glad you liked the poem.

      You can check out a few short stories and poems that I've written from "Short Stories" & "Poetry" pages.

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  20. Anupam Patra10 September 2012 at 22:32

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  21. Unknown11 September 2012 at 05:04

    well wriiten ... really liked it!!! good job!!
    Archana :)

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  22. Vishnu Keloth11 September 2012 at 06:14

    touching!!

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  23. ANULATA RAJ NAIR11 September 2012 at 06:44

    nice and heart touching poem....
    loved it!!

    anu

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  24. NIKITA11 September 2012 at 12:18

    amazing thoughts dear.........

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  25. aargeeyes11 September 2012 at 21:51

    Nice one Anupam. Very glad to see that you are trying out various things in writing. It needs a stuff and a strong belief that you can. And you are. Thanks for sharing.
    So the eagle from that day onwards
    Was found next to the little bird.
    And gave all that it ever had
    To compensate and served as guard

    To that little mynah which was
    Hurt unintentionally by it.
    Without thinking twice, it was
    The apt decision, that it saw fit.

    We may hurt someone without
    A cause or need, accidentally.
    If only we do regret about
    And make amends, we get an ally.

    Life is a long process in which
    You get some friends and foes.
    More of first is what we wish,
    Alas! Increasing is our woes.

    If we do not hurt others
    Lesser in stature than us,
    Chances are, we aren't hurt neither
    By those who are stronger than us.

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    1. Anupam Patra11 September 2012 at 21:57

      Oh wow !!! It's like Fallen - Part II

      Super work dear. You've given a new meaning to the whole poem.

      Lovely poetry and some wonderful rhyming

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  26. D.Nambiar12 September 2012 at 00:50

    Ah! lovely; especially the ending.

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  27. ajeethboaz12 September 2012 at 04:59

    Well narrated, good job...

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  28. Caring Enemies12 September 2012 at 20:31

    When pen has so much to reveal... eyes actually gets surprised to accept it.....
    I loved the way poem has poured effect of liveliness in it...

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    1. Anupam Patra12 September 2012 at 21:13

      I'm touched by your generous gesture Ketan.
      Thanks

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  29. Surabhi12 September 2012 at 23:03

    Hi Anupam, this is probably my first read on your blog and the first thing I read, I loved it. Wonderfully well written. I could actually visualize it and thats the beauty of good writing.

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  30. Unknown18 September 2012 at 22:38

    nicely written Anupam. the end glorifies ur poem. I see you cud have also ended it on a gloomy note.. generally many poems now do.. but the end demystified the gloom..

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    1. Anupam Patra18 September 2012 at 23:24

      Thanks for your words of appreciation. I'm delighted by 'em.

      Keep visiting Pratik.

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  31. GoddessChhavi27 November 2012 at 09:24

    Amazing poem, Anupam! I love how this story will always be in my heart from now on. Thanks for sharing!

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