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Friday, 6 July 2012

The Fallen




A myna I knew, loved the clouds

She soared high free from doubts

Came an eagle and they tangled mid air

She came tumbling down to the earthen layer




The eagle was gentle so he flew down

To humbly ask for the myna's pardon

The myna quickly forgave

The ignorant eagle took her leave




Watching the eagle fly high

She stood again ready to try

'Twas then she knew that a wing she'd lost

Now all she could do, was hop on dust



With dusk returned the mighty bird

Shocked to see the work of his hand

With the hurting myna he stayed back

Thence every day, dusk and nights black






60 comments:

  1. well written, anupam... always enjoy reading your posts!

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    1. Thanks Ash. I'm indeed lucky to have such supportive readers like you. Who lend their support to me for all my write ups.

      Thank You lady !!!

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  2. loved this one, specially the ending!

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    1. Hello Sohini,

      'M glad that you liked the poem and its ending. The last stanza was penned by me after 12 hours of publishing the poem. Originally it comprised the first three stanzas only as I wanted to keep it sad. But I guess I came around to give it an optimistic ending. Therefore the ending is my fav too.\

      Thanks Sohini, and welcome aboard !!!

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    2. I am glad you gave it an optimistic ending! It is wonderful.

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  3. Good one, and particularly bcoz of its ending. Tragic endings have their charms but nothing beats one that reaffirms our faith in virtues and belief in a just world. M glad u added the 4th stanza.

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  4. gud one Anupam..loved reading it :)

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  5. Very Nice Anupam. Nice message!

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  7. nice poem :) *With dusk returned the mighty bird

    Shocked to see the work of his hand

    With the hurting myna he stayed back

    Thence every day, dusk and nights black

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    loved reading :)

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  8. Excellent meaning behind the lines...!! Liked the way you have written the poem!

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  9. lot of wonderful ladies comments... :)(smiling)
    NIce poem... good work .I see you write fewer poems but when it comes ,it expresses everything.

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    1. Ha Ha..I guess the wonderful ladies are fond of the Myna.
      Thanks for reading Gunjan

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  10. wonderful work :) keep going :)

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  11. Splendid Anupam ... loved reading it !!

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  12. Hi ,


    Dropped by to thank you for liking my post on Indivine. Im not usually a fan of poetry , but I enjoyed reading this one.I think you did well to add the bittersweet ending.

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  13. Beautiful story weaved as poem! Lovely thoughts!

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  14. Lovely poem, beautiful alignment of words to express emotions.

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    1. Thanks Satya for your generous words of appreciation

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  15. Ah this is a very heartening thought--well penned.

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  16. This is the first time I am reading poetry on your blog. I always come here for the excellent posts you write related to law. Well written!

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    1. Thanks Deepa. I'm glad you liked the poem.

      You can check out a few short stories and poems that I've written from "Short Stories" & "Poetry" pages.

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  18. well wriiten ... really liked it!!! good job!!
    Archana :)

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  19. nice and heart touching poem....
    loved it!!

    anu

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  20. amazing thoughts dear.........

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  21. Nice one Anupam. Very glad to see that you are trying out various things in writing. It needs a stuff and a strong belief that you can. And you are. Thanks for sharing.
    So the eagle from that day onwards
    Was found next to the little bird.
    And gave all that it ever had
    To compensate and served as guard

    To that little mynah which was
    Hurt unintentionally by it.
    Without thinking twice, it was
    The apt decision, that it saw fit.

    We may hurt someone without
    A cause or need, accidentally.
    If only we do regret about
    And make amends, we get an ally.

    Life is a long process in which
    You get some friends and foes.
    More of first is what we wish,
    Alas! Increasing is our woes.

    If we do not hurt others
    Lesser in stature than us,
    Chances are, we aren't hurt neither
    By those who are stronger than us.

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    1. Oh wow !!! It's like Fallen - Part II

      Super work dear. You've given a new meaning to the whole poem.

      Lovely poetry and some wonderful rhyming

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  22. Ah! lovely; especially the ending.

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  23. When pen has so much to reveal... eyes actually gets surprised to accept it.....
    I loved the way poem has poured effect of liveliness in it...

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    1. I'm touched by your generous gesture Ketan.
      Thanks

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  24. Hi Anupam, this is probably my first read on your blog and the first thing I read, I loved it. Wonderfully well written. I could actually visualize it and thats the beauty of good writing.

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  25. nicely written Anupam. the end glorifies ur poem. I see you cud have also ended it on a gloomy note.. generally many poems now do.. but the end demystified the gloom..

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    1. Thanks for your words of appreciation. I'm delighted by 'em.

      Keep visiting Pratik.

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  26. Amazing poem, Anupam! I love how this story will always be in my heart from now on. Thanks for sharing!

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