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Friday, 17 August 2012

Loner




I sit by my window, watching the world
I drink all the water falling from above
Though not a drop touches my tongue
It satiates a certain thing - a deep love

I see  guardedly clad damsels 

I see in them a desire to soak
I see racing hearts invisible
I see what the rains reveal

They rekindle something long doused

They whisper to some forgotten shade
They pull without even looking
And I rise from being a Nothing

But when they are gone

I have nothing to watch
Anymore
They abandon me like a door

It's me and the drops again

They trickle down my brows
They all come swift
Intend to become a lot

I recede & remember a fool

And recall her saying of a rule
Her words -  "My Love, My Dear
You're doomed to be an incorrigible loner"




70 comments:

  1. Wow!!! Beautiful creation.

    "I sit by my window, watching the world
    I drink all the water falling from above
    Though not a drop touches my tongue
    It satiates a certain thing - a deep love" :My fav lines.

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    1. Thanx Laxmi. Your kind words have indeed encouraged me.

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  2. She used to always say "My Love, My Dear
    You're all set to become an incorrigible loner" - pathos in these words .... lovely creation Anupam :-)

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  3. Woow.. This I can appreciate more while heartedly ... hmm i didnt know you do poems too ... very poignant piece...

    Ritz..

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    1. I started this blog mainly to write poems and stories.

      Do check out out a few of them in the "Poetry" and "Stories" pages.

      Thanks for your kind appreciation

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  4. But when they are gone
    I have nothing to watch
    Anymore
    They abandon me like a door..

    Loved the simile you used hear..
    superb writing as ever :)

    missed lots of posts :P
    hope you doing fine !!

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    1. Hey Jyoti

      How are you ? Welcome back.

      Lovely to see your review. Encouraging as always.

      Yeah, you did miss a few posts. Hopefully you'll read them soon dear. It's always interesting to have your feedback.

      Regards

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  5. I'm good..
    more busy then ever :P
    but you know blogging is too enticing to part with..
    so I hop back whenever I can..

    Always enjoy reading you.

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    1. Great!!!

      Thanks & Always be around !!!

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  6. well-expressed, those chaos of a loner..
    It is soulful, Anupam..Keep it up!

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  7. I like it! Nice post! Thank you for sharing your views!

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    1. Thanks Amit ji. Means much, coming from a remarkable poet like you.

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  10. Thoughtful poem, Anupam.. but how can you be a loner, with so many blogger friends?

    www.anucreations.blogspot.in

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    1. How I wish blogosphere had a street address. It'd have been a home for many a homeless like me.

      Thanks for being a friend Anupama :) :)

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  11. Interesting and so nice to read this.. No man is island...:) Nice... Dear Anupam

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    1. Thank You Ayesha. You've gifted me a smile

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  12. As several people have pointed out, being part of this community means you're never alone. and that's a great thing. in fact, you're one of the guys who keeps it going.

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    1. Thanks Shovon for your reassuring words

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  13. Being alone feels right at times, especially when subtle n deep thoughts haunt the mind so easily...!Very nice!

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    1. Thank You Panchali ji for your thoughtful words.

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  14. You know, I somehow love incorrigible learners.

    But your poem is nice as usual.

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    1. Thanks for reassuring me, Matheikal.

      I'm humbled by your appreciation

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    1. Thanks Vinisha. You're always kind to my works.

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  16. Wonderful poem Anupam....I loved the last but one stanza!..."They all come alone but
    Together become a lot"....Awesome thought!

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  17. The last lines did it for me. Being a loner makes you write so well :D

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    1. The madness lies in this truth - A hundred people ask you 'Why the heck do you feel lonely ?' You look at them surrounding you and feel lonelier than ever.

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    2. Apart from that, Thanks Ghazala for your indulgence. It is significant company.

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  18. Beautiful... In love with the first stanza....

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    1. The beginning of it all. You like the sunrise of solitude. Wonderful to know that.

      Thanks for your kind remarks.

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  19. Beautiful! I like this genre of writing :)
    "They rekindle something long doused
    They whisper to some forgotten shade
    They pull without even looking
    And I rise from being a nothing"

    Great lines!

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    1. Prateek, I'm glad you like the verses.

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  20. Wow bro u did write a wondeful poem....Its just so awesome... :)

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  21. It's me and the drops again
    They trickle down my brows
    They all come alone but
    Together become a lot - Loved these lines a lot..

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    1. Thanks a ton, Ranita for your kind encouragement

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  22. I always wanted to write poems but I realized it's a god given gift. Not everyone has it. You clearly have that. Loved this one. :) Will visit again

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    1. Thank You Ana.

      I humbly suggest you to give it a try. You'll never know what God has gifted you with, until you lift the pen.

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  23. Brilliantly poignant. The last two lines were just epic!

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  24. It began extremely well..
    you have a very subtle way of writing, according to me :)

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  25. hey its beautiful as ever.. but why you feel lonely? you get all those superb comments my bro, so never feel lonely!

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    1. Thanks Rohan. With friends like you I guess I'm not alone

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  26. at some point of our life we all feel like this...well written!!liked it :)

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    1. Yeah we do Jasmin. Thanks for reading 'Loner'

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  27. well written :)

    http://saurabhchawla2345.blogspot.in/2012/12/reincarnation.html

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  28. Poignant . You stir the soul . In solitude we write the best pieces ever. Last two lines , epic.

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